ENGL 363 Review - BParkins,

EGomez, JSerrano
by Brian Parkins
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review?
unclear:
positive effects
when induced
by
someone/thing
triggering. . . or
positive effects
when induced
because they
trigger . . .?
citation?
your abstract says just Alzheimer's?
again,
actor/action
unclear here
What kind? to what?
by body? or
scientists?
adding
descriptive
words helps
readers read
without
questioning
their
understanding:
try "displays
function as the
body's
"weapon of
last resort,"
assuming
cite
normally?
QM
FINAL GRADE
100/100
ENGL 363 Review - BParkins, EGomez, JSerrano
GRADEMARK REPORT
GENERAL COMMENTS
Instructor
Jaw-dropping work here, team. Not only did your work
help me understand this very complicated subject, it also
_interested me_. Wow.
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Text Comment. review?
Text Comment. unclear: positive effects when induced by someone/thing triggering. . . or positive
effects when induced because they trigger . . .?
Text Comment. citation?
delete
some words or phrases here are unnecessary; they may even cloud your meaing.
Text Comment. your abstract says just Alzheimer's?
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Text Comment. again, actor/action unclear here
Text Comment. What kind? to what?
Text Comment. by body? or scientists? adding descriptive words helps readers read without
questioning their understanding: try "displays function as the body's "weapon of last resort," assuming
that's what you mean here.
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Text Comment. cite
QM
Text Comment. normally?
Design feature
Classy way to highlight important information.
Additional Comment I love this! Great job creating your own graphic for clarity!
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RUBRIC: REVIEW ARTICLE RUBRIC
AUD. & PURP.
ABSENT/BELOW
BASIC
DEVELOPING
PROFICIENT
ADVANCED
SOURCES
ABSENT/BELOW
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DEVELOPING
PROFICIENT
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BALANCED ARG.
ABSENT/BELOW
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DEVELOPING

Advanced
SLO #1: Write formally and informally, in-class and out-of-class, for a variety of audiences and purposes.
Audience's needs are often not recognized: terms and ideas either need explanation or are
over explained and language needs adjustment for the journal's audience. Purpose (to
familiarize readers with research regarding a contemporary subject of interest) isn't clear or
achieved.
Shows some attention to audience's needs, sometimes defining necessary terms and ideas
and using audience-appropriate language. Purpose (to familiarize readers with research
regarding a contemporary subject of interest) may be unclear at times, and it may not be
achieved convincingly.
Usually shows attention to audience's needs, defining necessary terms and ideas and using
audience-appropriate language. Purpose (to familiarize readers with research regarding a
contemporary subject of interest) may be implied, but it's clear and achieved.
Shows sophisticated attention to audience's needs, defining necessary terms and ideas and
using audience-appropriate language. Purpose (to familiarize readers with research
regarding a contemporary subject of interest) is clear and achieved with style.
Proficient
SLO #2: Find, evaluate, select, synthesize, organize, ethically cite, and present information from a variety of
sources appropriate to their disciplines.
Fails to use MLA- or APA-style parenthetical citations, quotation marks, and works cited list
as specified by journal. Frequently uses irrelevant or unpersuasive sources.
A few errors in MLA- or APA-style parenthetical citations, quotation marks, and works cited
list. Sometimes uses irrelevant or unpersuasive sources.
Almost always uses MLA- or APA-style parenthetical citations, quotation marks, and works
cited list as specified by journal. Use of sources is usually relevant and persuasive.
Correctly uses MLA- or APA-style parenthetical citations, quotation marks, and works cited
list as specified by journal. Use of sources is always relevant and persuasive.
Advanced
SLO #3: Compare, contrast, and synthesize carefully and objectively the relative merits of alternative or opposing
arguments, assumptions, and cultural values.
Fails to demonstrate similarities and differences between research of different scholars. May
be biased in presentation of research. Descriptions of research may be unclear.
Sometimes demonstrates similarities and differences between research of different
scholars. Attempts to synthesize this research carefully and objectively. Some descriptions
may be unclear.
PROFICIENT
ADVANCED
ORGANIZATION
ABSENT/BELOW
BASIC
DEVELOPING
PROFICIENT
ADVANCED
PERSUASION
ABSENT/BELOW
BASIC
DEVELOPING
PROFICIENT
ADVANCED
DESIGN
ABSENT/BELOW
BASIC
DEVELOPING
PROFICIENT
Usually demonstrates similarities and differences between research of different scholars
with clarity. Synthesizes this research carefully and objectively. Describes the research,
usually noting objectively merits of various procedures.
Demonstrates similarities and differences between research of different scholars with clarity
and sophistication. Synthesizes this research carefully and objectively. Describes the
research, noting objectively merits of various procedures.
Advanced
SLO #4: Organize ones thoughts and communicate them clearly to address a rhetorical situation. Employs IMRAD
structure where appropriate.
Organizational devices (headings, topic sentences, transitions) may be absent, unrelated to
the prompt, or illogically connected. Ps are usually not unified or organized.
Organizational devices (headings, topic sentences, transitions) fit the prompt, but may be
vague, too broad, or inconsistenly or illogically linked. Ps may not be unified.
Clear, specific organizational devices (headings, topic sentences, transitions) fit the prompt
and tie ideas together adequately.
Clear, specific organizational devices (headings, topic sentences, transitions) fit the prompt
and tie ideas together logically and seamlessly.
Advanced
SLO #4: Communicate clearly and persuasively to address a rhetorical situation.
Inadequate, inappropriate, or irrelevant reasoning and evidence.
Over uses or under-analyzes evidence. May omit reasoning and include some irrelevant or
unpersuasive evidence.
Usually supports paragraph claims with persuasive reasoning and credible, relevant,
analyzed evidence.
Supports paragraph claims with relevant, thorough, and insightful reasoning and analyzed
evidence.
Advanced
SLO #5: Recognize, evaluate, and employ the features and contexts of design that express and influence meaning
and that demonstrate sensitivity to gender and cultural differences.
Tone and/or design usually suggest/s an absence of awareness of audience and/or generic
conventions.
Tone and/or design are/is sometimes inappropriate or unconventional.
Appropriate tone and design conform to assigned audience and genre.
ADVANCED
LANGUAGE
ABSENT/BELOW
BASIC
DEVELOPING
PROFICIENT
ADVANCED
COLLABORATION
ABSENT/BELOW
BASIC
DEVELOPING
PROFICIENT
ADVANCED
Sophisticated tone and design engage reader and conform to assigned audience and genre.
Advanced
SLO #5: Recognize, evaluate, and employ the features and contexts of language that express and influence
meaning and that demonstrate sensitivity to gender and cultural differences.
Spelling, syntax, diction, or punctuation errors impede readability.
Spelling, syntax, diction, or punctuation errors impede readability or otherwise distract from
meaning.
Spelling, syntax, diction, or punctuation errors are few and do not distract from meaning.
Outstanding control of language, including effective diction and sentence variety.
Advanced
SLO #6: Improve ones own and others writing skills through the assessment and critique of written works.
Team's work seems to have been cobbled together: there may be rough transitions or
repetition among sections. Language often shifts from paragraph to paragraph. No evidence
of collaboration at the revision stage.
Team's work seems to have been cobbled together without a smoothing of transitions.
Language often shifts from paragraph to paragraph. Collaboration may have been minimal at
the revision stage.
Team's work is usually effectively meshed. Language is usually similar throughout
document. Collaboration has occurred at the revision stage.
Team's work is clearly and effectively meshed. Language is similar throughout document.
Collaboration is obvious and effective.