Professional Documents
Culture Documents
by Max Harris
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T IME SUBMIT T ED
16-SEP-2014 04:39PM
WORD COUNT
408
SUBMISSION ID
453041239
CHARACT ER COUNT
1746
GENERAL COMMENTS
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Instructor
PAGE 1
Comment 1
cool title!
Comment 2
T his is a bit clunky. Rework.
Pronoun
Prep.
Comment 3
Use f irst person in this essay. Avoid "you" at all cost.
Pronoun
Comment 4
Don't tell me, show me by recalling your personal lif e experience. How did you gain this wisdom?
How do you know this to be true?
Sp.
T his word is misspelled. Use a dictionary or spellchecker when you proof read your work.
Comment 5
T his f eels of f topic. Bring it back to your original belief .
Missing ","
0 /5
0/5
T he text sets up a story by introducing the event/conf lict, characters and setting.
EXCEPTIONAL
(5)
T he text creatively engages the reader by setting out a well-developed conf lict,
situation, or observation. T he text establishes one or multiple points of view and
introduces a narrator and/or complex characters.
SKILLED
(4)
T he text engages and orients the reader by setting out a conf lict, situation, or
observation. It establishes one or multiple points of view and introduces a narrator
and/or well-developed characters.
PROFICIENT
(3)
T he text orients the reader by setting out a conf lict, situation, or observation. It
establishes one point of view and introduces a narrator and/or developed characters.
DEVELOPING
(2)
T he text provides a setting with a vague conf lict, situation, or observation with an
unclear point of view. It introduces a narrator and/or underdeveloped characters.
INADEQUATE
(1)
T he text provides a setting that is unclear with a vague conf lict, situation, or
observation. It has an unclear point of view and underdeveloped narrator and/or
characters.
DEVELOPMENT (20%)
0/5
T he story is developed using dialogue, pacing, description, ref lection and multiple plot lines.
EXCEPTIONAL
(5)
SKILLED
(4)
PROFICIENT
(3)
T he text uses narrative techniques, such as dialogue, description, ref lection, that
illustrate events and/or characters.
DEVELOPING
(2)
T he text uses some narrative techniques, such as dialogue or description that merely
retells events and/or experiences.
INADEQUATE
(1)
T he text lacks narrative techniques and merely retells events and/or experiences.
0/5
SKILLED
(4)
PROFICIENT
(3)
DEVELOPING
(2)
INADEQUATE
(1)
ST YLE (20%)
0/5
T he text uses sensory language and details to create a vivid picture of the events, setting, and characters.
EXCEPTIONAL
(5)
T he text uses eloquent words and phrases, showing details and rich sensory
language and mood to convey a realistic picture of the experiences, events, setting,
and/or characters.
SKILLED
(4)
T he text uses precise words and phrases, showing details and controlled sensory
language and mood to convey a realistic picture of the experiences, events, setting,
and/or characters.
PROFICIENT
(3)
T he text uses words and phrases, telling details and sensory language to convey a
vivid picture of the experiences, events, setting, and/or characters.
DEVELOPING
(2)
T he text uses words and phrases and telling details to convey experiences, events,
settings, and/or characters.
INADEQUATE
(1)
CONCLUSION (20%)
0/5
T he text provides a conclusion that f ollows f rom the course of the narrative. T he conclusion provides a
ref lection on or resolution of the events.
EXCEPTIONAL
(5)
T he text moves to a conclusion that artf ully f ollows f rom and thoughtf ully ref lects on
what is experienced, observed, or resolved over the course of the narrative.
SKILLED
(4)
T he text builds to a conclusion that logically f ollows f rom and ref lects on what is
experienced, observed, or resolved over the course of the narrative.
PROFICIENT
(3)
T he text provides a conclusion that f ollows f rom and ref lects on what is experienced,
observed, or resolved over the course of the narrative.
DEVELOPING
(2)
INADEQUATE
(1)