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My title was incorrectly formatted: By Means of Persuasion does not need to be bolded.
Revision of a sentence where I use generic language. My use of the word "common" in
"Pima Medical Institute is recognized as one of the most common medical programs in
New Mexico could be revised to Pima Medical Institute is recognized as a medical
career college that prepares students for careers in the medical field.
Revision of a sentence that sounds dull. To make my sentence more appealing, I change
the sentence to Students in the medical field are constantly plagued with thoughts of
money and time instead of A couple main ideas centered on the medical field by
dont want to spend our time stuck in school but out in the workforce gaining hand on
experience.
Revision of the sentence where the use of the word moderate is a bit confusing. In its
original context: From learning basic medical procedures to fairly moderate procedures,
students gain an understanding of whats to come in their field work to changing the
sentence to: From learning basic medical procedures to much more complex procedures,
Despite the fact I received a really good grade on my rhetorical analysis there were areas that
could have been improved. With few and minor errors I was able to easily correct them. Looking
back now, its obvious that I could have made these changes prior to initially turning in my
paper. Most of my errors could have been simply fixed had I reread my paper. Overall, I was
very proud of how I did on my paper and the improvements that I made to it.