Professional Documents
Culture Documents
MEETS
BELOW
X
The
composition
clearly
presents
and
analyzes
a
significant
political/social/cultural
problem
and
establishes
the
problems
urgency,
scope,
and
severity.
The
problem
is
clearly
framed
and
focused;
it
is
not
presented
as
the
writers
opinion,
but
is
a
sourced
argument,
backed
up
with
credible
sources.
Comments:
The
scale
and
severity
of
the
problem
is
presented
immediately,
and
backed
up
with
a
credible
source.
Presently in the United States, there are a total of 19,448 cases of animal
Problem
Statement
and
History
abuse, 11,894 of which list dogs as the victims according to Pet-Abuse.com, an online database
that documents incidents of animal cruelty.
X
The
composition
presents
and
analyzes
solution(s)
to
the
central
problem
(Macro
and
micro
solution
offered).
Rigorous
and
well-
documented
arguments
that
address
a
possible
solution
or
solutions
are
presented
clearly.
Comments:
The
social
media
aspect
of
the
solutions
could
use
expanding.
Taking advantage of
Analysis
of
Solutions
this convenient method of information dissemination, we can bring a greater awareness to the
problems of canine abuse. is somewhat vague at the moment.
Argument
Development
and
Counterargument:
X
Uses
at
least
one
multi-modal
element,
and
this
element
strengthens
and
deepens
explanations,
summaries,
or
arguments.
Visual
evidence
is
dense
and
diverse
in
information,
yet
communicates
information
clearly
and
effectively.
Comments:
Excellent
use
of
self-made
infographics.
The
dog
expressions
image
in
particular
was
very
effective
and
helping
the
reader
understand
complex
forms
of
dog
communication.
X
Organization/Arrangement
The
project
is
well-organized
and
easy
to
follow,
with
transitions,
of
Evidence:
topic
sentences
and/or
headers
to
help
guide
the
reader;
the
presentation
of
evidence
is
arranged
coherently
and
demonstrates
a
well-documented
analytical
synthesis.
Comments:
The
section
headings
are
helpful
for
identifying
each
section
of
the
essay,
however
transitions
could
be
stronger.
The
literature
review
could
use
some
transition
sentences
to
emphasize
the
shifting
historical
perspective,
however
that
could
be
challenging
as
that
area
might
need
to
be
trimmed
due
to
length
constraints.
Scholarly
Ethos
Throughout
the
composition,
the
writer
illustrates
the
scholarly
ethos
X
of
a
well-informed,
objective,
and
credible
advocate.
Comments:
Constructing
complex
arguments
that
tie-in
differing
articles
and
sources
makes
the
writer
seem
well-versed
in
the
topic:
These findings are made more intriguing when we
Multi-Modal
Element(s)
consider the strength of the human-canine relationship dogs are able to form with their caretakers
that was demonstrated by the kennel experiment conducted by Tuber et al
compositions
argumentative
moves.
Comments:
All
of
the
sources
are
diverse,
but
extremely
relevant
to
the
topic
at
hand:
lawmakers,
researchers,
and
public
activists
all
support
a
specific
argument
from
various
angles.
Source
Use
and
Integration The
composition
uses
sources
X
appropriately
in
distinct
and
different
capacities:
primary/secondary,
exhibit/argument/background.
The
author
integrates
the
sources
seamlessly
into
the
composition
and
properly
introduces
them.
Comments:
As
mentioned
previously,
the
diverse
are
all
used
in
areas
when
they
could
be
most
effective.
At
times
the
introductions
can
be
wordy
(see
comments
in
essay),
but
are
good
at
reinforcing
the
credibility
of
the
sources.
Documentation
&
The
AP
is
formatted
correctly
using
X
Formatting
MLA
formatting
(this
includes
margins,
page
number
location,
and
page
1
header).
Sources
are
documented
appropriately
using
MLA;
this
includes
appropriate
captions
for
multi-modal
elements
and
correct
format
for
Works
Cited.
Comments:
No
issues
to
be
found.
Even
the
multi-modal
elements
have
proper
citations.
Comments:
At
times,
the
transitions
are
very
effective.
For
example,
first
the
writer
lays
the
foundation
of
the
historical
perception
of
dogs,
and
then
uses
the
following
transition
to
move
into
more
recent
scientific
studies:
More recent studies from the late 20th to early 21st century
provide even further insight into canine intelligence and learning and its effect on our
consideration of dogs as conscious intelligent creatures. More transitions like that will bolster the
flow of the paper.
Required Elements