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CONTENTS
ULTP Single Analysis Success Criteria
ULTP Comparative Analysis Success Criteria
Single Article Analysis LAs Essay Structure
Comparative Analysis LA Essay Structure
Advice From the Examiner
2013 Examination Examiners Report
How to annotate: Modelled Annotation
Student Sample: Single Language Analysis
2006 Exam: Comparative Analysis
2006 Exam Student Sample: Comparative LA
Essay
Improved Comparative Body Paragraph
Sample Introductions and Introduction
Template
Sample Conclusions and Conclusion Template
Vague Analysis: What Not To Do
Vocabulary and Sentence Starters
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3. Effective use
of
metalanguage.
Success Criteria
Annotate articles
Identify and analyse PLTs
Identify and analyse other ways authors persuade (such as: layout, ordering of arguments, tonal shifts, how a
text begins or ends etc.)
Consider the author and intended audiences background/experiences/ values and profession when analysing
how the author has constructed their arguments
Critically analyse the way an author has constructed a writing piece without summarising or interpreting what is
said
Make connections between various aspects of the texts when analysing
Analyse images in depth and can pick out specific elements of it to draw unique and insightful analysis
Analyse the article in a way that demonstrates their critical and unique authorial voice
Consider multiple interpretations of the text in their analysis and acknowledge, extend or challenge them
Write an introduction (ITACT), body paragraph and conclusion following the designated format
Write in a clear and easy to understand way without sacrificing quality and depth
Sentences are not superfluous/ do not go on and on
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Success Criteria
Annotate articles
Identify and analyse PLTs
Identify and analyse other ways authors persuade (such as: layout, ordering of arguments, tonal shifts,
how a text begins or ends etc.)
Consider the author and intended audiences background/experiences/ values and profession when
analysing how the author has constructed their arguments
Critically analyse the way an author has constructed a writing piece without summarising or interpreting
what is said
Make connections between various aspects of the texts when analysing
Analyse images in depth and can pick out specific elements of it to draw unique and insightful analysis
Write meaningful analysis that is not vague or simplistic
Analyse the article in a way that demonstrates their critical and unique authorial voice
Consider multiple interpretations of the text in their analysis and acknowledge, extend or challenge them
Compare the ways to different articles have been constructed and analyse why
Write an introduction (ITACT), body paragraph and conclusion following the designated format
Write in a clear and easy to understand way without sacrificing quality and depth
Sentences are not superfluous/ do not go on and on
3. Effective use
of
LO
W
ME
D
HIG
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metalanguage.
Brainstormed subject specific vocabulary and are using adjectives that better describe the effect of the
writing on the reader
Vary language
Know the metalanguage but do NOT technique label
Conclusio
n
Body
Paragraph
s
(3-4)
ITACT
Issue Give an overview of the issue and what triggered
it
Text details Authors name, Name of Article, Name of
publication, Text type
Audience Mention the intended audience
Contention State the authors contention
Tone State the authors main tone and analyse its
intended effect
Introducti
on
LANGUAGE ANALYSIS
ESSAY STRUCTURE Single
Analysis
LANGUAGE ANALYSIS
ESSAY STRUCTURE
Multiple Analysis
Analyse ARTICLE 1.
Identify and discuss their arguments and
HOW/WHY they are constructed. Analyse the
intended efect of the writers choices on
their intended reader. Analyse
tone/visuals/structural elements/ choice and
use of PLTs etc. Demonstrate knowledge of
HOW/WHY the text was constructed in that
particular way because of the: context of the
issue/intended audience/authors
experiences
Body
Paragraph
2
ARTICLE 2
Body
Paragraph
1
ARTICLE 1
Introducti
on
Conclusion
Body
Paragraph
3
SIMILARITIE
S
Body
Paragraph
4
DIFFERENC
ES
INSTEAD Write:
newsletter, distributed to households in the surrounding area, the Grow Slow Garden Group
strongly contends that a community garden is both innovative, productive and healthy and
hence should be favoured over other plans and projects including a skateboard ramp and
carpark.
Addressing fellow members of the community, the group appeals to the readers sense of
unity and patriotism to urge everyone to work together when faced with the issue of the
proposed land use. Starting the piece with as just about everyone knows, the Grow Slow
Garden Group uses a very personal and relatable tone to draw their readers to view the
proposal as a group and community effort. There is a shift in the tone of the piece as the
group encourages their critics who view them as a radical group to change their opinions
and see them as a sincere, responsible and proud environmental group instead, whose only
goal is to help the community. The juxtaposition between the words extreme as they have
been labelled with the powerful use of proud positions readers who have objected to their
group and their proposal to feel ashamed and more inclined to support their fellow
community members as well as the rest of Australia, appealing to the readers sense of
patriotism. This notion of unity if further enhanced by the reference to the second world war
in which British citizens had to work together in order to feed their families. Appealing to the
older generation who may have children the image of the war poster arouses the readers
sense of patriotism as well as strikes their hearts due to the smiling faces of the children in
the background. The words for their sake, encourages parents to protect their children and
their futures, showing them that a community garden can both protect their children and be
beneficial towards them if they grow [their] own vegetables. The depiction of the boot and
shovel also arouse feelings of hard work and effort, which may make readers feel the need to
support and stand up for their community and implement the proposal of the community
garden.
Moving away from the notion of parental responsibility, the group argues that there is a
crisis at hand involving all members of the community, especially taxpayers. The use of the
word crisis has negative connotations of disaster and chaos, evoking feelings of unease and
unrest within readers who may face problems if the issue of the unused area of land remains
unresolved. Appealing to families who have to feed their families as well as couple and other
tax-paying members of the community, the group highlights the issue of packaged frozen and
take away being consumed which costs the state millions of dollars.
Consumption of these sorts of foods has led to an overwhelming cost reaching over 350
million dollars as shown in the graph. The easy-to-read visual with the graph that has a scale
of millions 4 may shock readers who are unaware of the hidden price tag, alarming them
and dissuading them from eating parched, takeaway foods. The price tag is also shown on an
image of a shopping trolley, further dissuading readers. Hence, the fresh food that is less
likely to be tossed out for grown from community gardens is more sustainable alternative to
unhealthy and wasteful foods and readers feel more inclined to support the community
garden and their products. As well as this, the council is also urged to establish a garden
which will reduce their spending costs.
Using a familiar and warm tone, the adults in the readership are drawn also to the authors
relatable anecdotes which promote health and education for children. The sense of
community is once again aroused as the Grow Slow Garden Group positions themselves with
their readers using most of us and referring to our loved ones (our Dad or Grandpa). These
feelings of care and affection that can be seen from putting seeds in the earth position
readers to feel that a community garden can provide not only resourcefully but also gives us
warm memories of childhood and our families. The notion that the community garden has no
barriers elicits a sense of acceptance and unity amongst the community who are then urged
to allow their children to do physical work in the fresh air and get to know their neighbours.
These actions induce positivity and are both beneficial to the body and mind, hence both
parents gain the readership and members of the council are encouraged to accept the
discussed proposal of the implementation of a community garden.
Alluding to the readers sense of community and togetherness, the Grow Slow Garden group
is able to draw their readers onside to view the establishment of the garden as beneficial,
both now and in the future. References to not only the short term advantages but also the
long term, encourages parents, taxpayers, member of council etc in the readership to see the
community garden as a positive and forward thinking project, which will be beneficial for
ourselves, our children and our planet.
Assessor comments
A thorough and controlled piece of writing.
Thoughtful analysis of specific words and phrases and the manner in which they are used in
an attempt to persuade.
There is a suitable balance between the specific analysis and the broader ideas.
Expression is accurate and fluent.
Clear understanding of both the task and the piece itself.
This is an upper-level script.
MODELLED ANNOTATION
ISSUE:
Late term
abortion
performed for
psychosocial
reasons
TEXT DETAILS:
(Highlight
these to save
time)
AUDIENCE:
Parents and
physicians
CONTENTION:
TONE:
Late term
abortion
performed for
psychosocial
reasons should
be illegalised
Appeal to
sympathy:
1B
Repetition:
Private clinics should be regulated so they lose their licence if they perform abortions
Dr Lachlan De Crespigny and Prof Julian Savulescu (Opinion 23/1) state that late
after 20 weeks. This would save the lives of 100 premmie babies a year.
abortion is done only "for major problems as a last resort", giving the example of a lethal
Instead of being wide awake to the devastating violence of late abortion, the public is
being lulled as to how rare it is and how necessary it is in the face of lethal abnormality.
In my view, if adults are so psychologically disturbed that they would take their healthy,
20-week baby, visibly kicking and jumping in the womb, to an abortion clinic, those
people need urgent psychological and social help.
The law must continue to restrain adults, and the doctors who would collaborate in such
an assault.
De Crespigny's argument lacks moral balance. It is as if the baby does not exist.
For our generation, late abortion is the test of whether or not our society sinks into
savagery, deaf to babies so callously sacrificed to the psychosocial comfort of adults.
Dr David van Gend is secretary to the World Federation of Doctors who Respect
Human Life
beings
ADAPTED TO ANALYSIS
FOR A PARAGRAPH
Van Gend asserts the
viability of pregnancies at
23-27 weeks by using
examples of babies that
have been born. The
strong imagery of
babies being cared for
ignites the readers
maternal/paternal
instinct in connecting
with these newborns and
positions them to see the
unborn foetus as babies
that need to be
protected. Furthermore,
the juxtaposition of the
loving life these babies
are born into and the
ID
IMAGERY: Connects to
the image and flattens
any assumption that the
foetus is unaware of the
murderous act that will
be carried out against it.
Main Idea/Argument 1:
Main Idea/Argument 2:
Main Idea/Argument 3:
Dr Van Gend asserts that LTA for
psychosocial reasons are selfish
and that anyone who performs or
endorses them lack moral
balance.
which reinforces the idea of late termination as entirely unnecessary as both mother and baby
are already healthy. Van Gend then goes on to position readers to see parents
contemplating late term abortion as overreacting by sarcastically attacking the belief that
late abortion is done for any reason thatstresses the parent. He applies another attack to
demoralise his opponents; De Crespignys argument lacks moral balance, asserting the
belief that the baby does not exist. As Van Gend is a physician and member of an antiabortion society, he seeks to portray other opposing doctors as cold and indifferent to human
life, and by contrast, himself and his beliefs as benevolent.
Van Gend puts forth the idea that 20 week old foetuses are babies in their own right. He
makes the generalisation that In many cases there are babies...who might have been born
alive and adopted to loving parents. This draws attention away from the idea that children
might be adopted into abusive or neglectful families. He then goes on to use informal
connotation, describing foetuses as ...premmie babies. The reader is drawn to perceive the
foetuses as worthy of survival, and in need of protection. This connects with the
accompanying image of a foetus in its mothers womb. The image invokes a maternal instinct
in readers, which prompts them to feel protective towards the developing child, and to feel a
sense of responsibility to protect them.
An alarmist tone is adopted by Van Gend when he asserts that late term abortion for
psychosocial reasons is happening more than previously thought. He blatantly appeals to
readers vanity by describing that most...late abortions... [are] done to entirely healthy
babies as the truth. This prompts readers to agree with Van Gend as they do not want to
be seen as fools. In a way, Van Gend portrays himself as a paternal figure guiding the readers
to make the correct decision regarding late term abortion. He goes on to make the
hyperbolic statement that late abortion for psychosocial reasons ...is by far the biggest single
cause of stillbirth in Victoria. This makes late term abortion seem like a larger factor than it
really is. Coupled with scare tactics in describing the numbers of late term abortions as
...rising fast, Van Gend plays on fears of the devastating consequences of late term
abortion, and prompts readers to assume that the rate is only going to rise.
Dr David Van Gends opinion piece attempts to convince proponents of and parents
considering aborting foetuses after 20 weeks that the practice is inhumane and dangerous.
Overall, he employs hyperbolic language with scare tactics and often statistics which positions
readers to see late term abortion as frightening, with dangerous consequences. It is
interesting that he employs statistics for such an emotive issue; however, it is effective in
portraying his contention as plausible and logical rather than emotionally charged. After
reading the piece, readers are left with the impression that aborting a foetus after 20 weeks is
inhumane, as they are capable of surviving and leading a life in the care of loving parents.
Readers are invited to imagine their own family in such a situation, and as a result look in
horror upon late term psychosocial termination.
happiness is simply not connected to having money and the things it can buy. The issue to consider is: can money buy
happiness?
The following is an article providing financial advice, published in Starting Out, a magazine for young people.
However, the second article Theres More To Happiness Than Money employs a more
academic and scientific tone. As suggested in the title, the writer challenges the highly valued
position of money within affluent societies and proposes that individuals adapt to higher
incomes. By citing the OECD as an expert authority in the field of psychographics, the writer
adds weight to their contention *** borderline vague or unimportant*** and validates their
subversion of commonplace values. Furthermore, the piece as a whole is constructed in a very
grounded manner, in that Australia and Australian income are focused on. This allows the
adult readers of Life Issues to identify with the subject of happiness and materialism without
feeling alienated and attacked. The editor oscillates between a scientific and philosophical
tone through using a variety of statistics as well as non-referential sentences. These
sentences do not contain anaphones which relate to the rest of the text and therefore allow
the idea that happiness as ephemeral to stand out as a philosophical truth in amongst
scientific reason. ***Always remember you are not required to analyse every part of the article. But
you would want to make sure that you analyse the sections which you have the most insightful
things to say about avoid looking at thing that the mediocre students will analyse OR/ ensure that is
you analyse these more obvious things that your analysis is tip top spectacular. Now whilst your
analysis is much better than mediocre here, I would like you to consider other things to analyse. What
of this structure of the arguments/? Why conclude in the way he does? Go into more depth analysing
this article this only shows a med-high understanding of the issue/why the article is constructed***
Due to being aimed at different audiences, the two articles have different purposes. In
Making Money Work For You the writer not only advises his adolescent audience in how to
spend some money theyve earned, it also attempts to introduce the traditionally mature
world of investment to these young people. In contrast, the editor of Theres More To
Happiness Than Money attempts to reassure those who have seen the limitations of
income on general wellbeing and to assert that an obsession with money is not conducive
to happiness. The use of ellipses in the titles of both pieces work in a contrasting manner. The
Starting Out writer implies that the answer to fiscal success lies in the article and the thus
the ellipses acts as a prelude to the advisory content. Whereas in the Life Issues editorial the
ellipses invite thought and a more reflective response as to what happiness is and how it is
linked to money. This links into the general consumerist tone of the first piece which features
a large dollar sign behind the text; illustrating that just as the dollar sign is behind the written
advice, so too is financial success behind and underlying stock investment. *** Excellent ***
Though the two pieces fundamentally operate on opposing views of the relationship between
money and happiness, they both define what happiness essentially is. Making Money Work
For You constructs the idea that money can be manipulated in a manner that allows the
audience not [to] worry anymore and therefore feel financial comfort and happiness. So too,
the Life Issues piece creates a link between unhappiness and social comparisons
illustrating to the audience that happiness is ephemeral and attained by counting ones
blessings. The materialistic focus of the articles continues as the writers appeal to the
desires of their audiences. The Starting Out writer encourages readers to actively write
down their desires, so as to make them more explicit and tangible. Moreover the Life Issues
editor encourages their audience to reflect upon the issues of happiness through the use of
rhetorical questions. This approach is taken by the writers who understand that their
audiences operate within a capitalist system and are seeking satisfaction. *** Excellent you
have got into the mind of the writer and the audience *** Where Overseas travel and A car
satiate the desires of the Starting Out young audience, similarly loving relationships and
purposeful work are more mature and emotional outlets of the same fundamental need for
satisfaction.
Though the content in the Starting Out financial advice article is mature, its youthful and
excitable presentation encourages and educates young people in the art of investment.
Therefore the readers are left with a sense of financial purpose and guidance, which prompts
them to seek to do more with their money as a means of obtaining future happiness. The Life
Issues piece conveys philosophical calm onto the audience who are searching for answers
concerning happiness. It provides readers with a fresh and unconventional perspective of
what happiness is within western culture. The readers arent necessarily prompted to make
physical changes, as their problems with happiness are more psychological. Rather, the
readers take away an intrinsic notion that happiness is temporary and found within oneself,
rather than external forces. ***If you can write a conclusion that embeds quotes and is as
worthwhile a read as this in the exam it will be awesome! Much more analytical than body par 2***
Both the editor of the advice column and the editorial explore the role of money in peoples
ability to lead happy lives. The advice columns headline turns the idea that people work for
money on its head. Instead it creates the ideas that making money work for individuals is a
simplistic and achievable state. The use of the ellipsis suggests that the column will explore
the possibilities money has in leading to peoples happiness and success. The editorial
similarly uses an ellipsis in the headline, stating Theres more to happiness than money....
However, in this piece the headline immediately refutes the advice columns suggestion that
money is a means for creating happiness and instead uses the ellipsis as means of positioning
readers to question the role of money in leading to individuals contentment. Both writers
repetitively use rhetorical questions in order to show the possibilities or limitations of money.
inhumane, as they are capable of surviving and leading a life in the care of loving parents.
Readers are invited to imagine their own family in such a situation, and as a result look in
horror upon late term psychosocial termination.
CONCLUSION SAMPLE 1: HIGH
Dr Van Gend concludes by forcing modern society to question their societys moral
conscience. Readers are left aghast, analysing whether they too are partly to blame for the
denigration of their society into one that disregards human life. Van Gends final criticism that
the loss of morality in society is all for the comfort of adults contradicts the self-sacrificing
aspiration of parents and ignites a sense of vehemence toward practioners or parents who
endorse later term abortion for psychosocial reasons.
Dr Van Gend argues that the foetus being aborted are more like innocent healthy babies. The
image of the unborn baby reminds us that the foetuses being aborted are babies. It positions
readers to think they are cute and feel sorry for them. The author repeats that they are
entirely healthy babies to persuade the reader that late-term abortions should be
illegalised. The imagery created when the author then says that they are visually kicking
and jumping in the womb further makes the reader agree with Dr Van Gends contention.
The fact that the author is an expert in his field, a secretary to the World Federation of
Doctors who respect Human Life gives him credibility and makes readers think that he cares
about the babies.
Task: Rewrite the body paragraph above eliminating any vague analysis and making
improvements where necessary.
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VOCABULARY
VERBS FOR SAYS THAT
Accentuates
Connotes
Downplays
Engenders
Fosters
Justifies
Signifies
Alerts
Contends
Denigrates
Enhances
Undercut
Promotes
Type cast
Alludes to
Demonstrates
Elicits
Evokes
Indicates
Provokes
Typify
Appeals
Devalues
Encourages
Exemplifies
Intensifies
Reveals
Undermine
Signifies
Underscore
Challenge
Type cast
Verify
Destabilize
Typify
The
The
The
The
The
The
The
[Writer]
[Writer]
[Writer]
[Writer]
reasons that
employs the use of [state PLT]
considers that
goes on to use [state PLT]
The
The
The
The
The
The
reader is positioned to
reader is challenged
reader is confronted by
reader is [insert emotion E.g. shocked]
reader is left with the impression
language...
At the close of the [text type], the writer returns to the idea of
Finally, the writer summarises the viewpoint by way...
In conclusion, the writer says that
The article concludes by re-iterating
Think
Absorb
Ponder
Imagine
Regard
Visualise
Form a new
perspective
Contemplate
Reconsider
Process
Feel
A sense of betrayal
Excitement
Shock
Insecure
Sympathetic
Threatened
Outraged
Disgusted
Concerned
Reassured
Do
Agree
Disagree
Take action
Protest
Complain
Digest
Encourage
Discover
See clearly
Stand up for
Positions
Undercuts
Impinge
Influence
Sway
Impress
Imprints
Prompts
Convince
Stimulate