Nayoung Hyun

Professor M.McCampbell
ENGL101
December 7, 2015
Title

104/130

Americans spent on average 7.6 hours a month on social media through their cell phones
(Whiteman). Moreover, sixty-three percent of American Facebook users log on social media
every day, and forty percent of users log on several times a day (Paddock). Dr. Shannon M.
Rauch, an assistant professor of psychology of Benedictine University at Mesa, said "For those
who post status updates, the reinforcements keep coming in the form of supportive comments
and 'likes.' And of course we know that behaviors that are consistently reinforced will be
repeated, so it becomes hard for a person who has developed this habit to simply stop"
(Whiteman). This can lead to social media addiction. According to Meikle, a special
correspondent for the Guardian, researchers who tried to evaluate how people could resist their
desire to log on said social media is harder to give up than cigarettes and alcohol. Constant use of
social media interrupts peoples lives. People should control using social media because social
media addiction can cause people feel anxious and think that they are unimportant.
People are easily addicted to social media, and it affects peoples feeling of anxiety and
insufficiency by themselves. An experiment, which measure the willpower of 205 participants
aged between 18 and 85 conducted by Wilhelm Hofmann, an assistant professor of behavioral
science at the University of Chicago Booth Business School, showed the participants were sent
messages over fourteen hours for seven constant days (Meikle). Ten thousand five hundred fifty-

eight participants responded and seven thousand eight hundred twenty-eight enjoyed the
experience (Meikle). Hofmann illustrated Desires for media may be comparatively harder to
resist because of their high availability and also because it feels like it does not cost much to
engage in these activities, even though one wants to resist (Meikle). As a result, social media is
easy to access and people can become addict before people are aware of it. According to a study
by the charity Anxiety UK, More than half (fifty-three percent) of the respondents said usage of
social media sites had changed their behavior, with half (fifty-one percent) of those saying the
impact had been negative (Paddock). Besides, they claimed their lives were gotten worse by
social media and felt less confident after comparing their accomplishments against their online
friends (Paddock). People who got high scores in a psychological scale devoted to measuring
addiction to Facebook said they feel more on edge and insecure than other people. Dr. Cecilie
Andraessen, a postdoctoral researcher of Department of Psychosocial Science from the
University of Bergen, said We have also found that people who are anxious and socially
insecure use Facebook more than those with lower scores on those traits, probably because those
who are anxious find it easier to communicate via social media than face-to-face (Paddock).
Through this experiment, social media addiction leads to problems not only about peoples lives
but also their feelings and self-control.
To solve the matter of social media addiction, there are eight steps for self-management.
First step is track your time online. This is the simplest and easiest way to make sure that people
do not waste time. Using a stopwatch can help people. If people see that they are on social media
too much, they can set a limit for themselves (Husain). Second step is calling people. This way
looks like so old fashion, but it helps human interaction because people are losing touch
(Husain). Third step is go outside instead of inside and take a break from social media.

Refreshing peoples mind might aid to forget social media for a while (Husain). Fourth step is
limit peoples accounts on social media. People should reduce their accounts on social media
sites. People have more than 2 accounts, it takes up more of their time less than 2 accounts
(Husain). Fifth step is limit amount of friends on social media. If people use social media to
share and interact with people with similar interests rather than people follow anyone only for
popularity (Husain). Sixth step is prioritize. People should only use social media after they finish
their work or during down time (Husain). Seventh step is remove the cellphone apps. Cellphone
apps interrupt people because people can easily access social media any time. People can save
time if they use social media only one place, such as on the desk, with limited time (Husain).
Last step is spend more time with close friends and family. If people interact with their friends
and family, it helps peoples relationships and keeps them away from social media instead of
spending numerous time in social media (Husain).
Social media addiction has become a serious issue because it is strongly addictive, and
causes negative feelings like anxiety and low self-esteem. People unconsciously use social media
all day. People should be aware of the risks of social media addiction. They need to manage and
control their social media in their lives, following eight steps. If they do not take about social
media addiction solemnly, it may become enormous problems in their lives.

Work Cited
Husain, Ibrahim. "Managing Your Social Network Addiction." Lifehack RSS. Web. 5 Dec. 2015.
Meikle, James. "Twitter Is Harder to Resist than Cigarettes and Alcohol, Study Finds."
Theguardian. 3 Feb. 2012. Web. 5 Dec. 2015.
Paddock, Catharine. "Facebook Use Feeds Anxiety And Inadequacy Says Small Study." Medical
News Today. MediLexicon, 10 Jul. 2012. Web. 5 Dec. 2015
Whiteman, Honor. "Social media: how does it affect our mental health and well-being?" Medical
News Today. MediLexicon,16 Apr. 2014. Web. 5 Dec. 2015.
ENGL 101
M. McCampbell
Fall 2015

ESSAY 4 - PROPOSAL
SCORING RUBRIC

Topic
Introducti
on
0 15
points
13

Thesis
0 10
points 7

Does not meet C

0 7 points
States the
problem; vague
reference to
solution.

Meets C standard
8 - 12 points

0 4 points
Identifies the
solution; flat
statement about

5 7 points

State the problem,

situation or enterprise;
support your reasoning
with researched
information to show how
there is a problem, a needy
situation or a worth
enterprise.

Identify the solution,

judges it, and shows its

Exceeds C paper
13 15 POINTS
States the problem;
clear background;
clearly shows who
/what is affected;
comments about
available initiatives;
Specific appeal to the
audience.

8 10 points
Cites reasons for the
solution.

see
commen
t about
general
wording.
Analyze
solution
and how
to
implemen
t it
0 15
points
10;
confusio
n about
number
of
participa
nts in
the
study;
no
commen
t on
costs or
how to
get
people
to follow
the
steps.
Evaluate
the
solution
0 15
points
11

the solution.

relationship to the
problem, situation or
enterprise .

0 7 points
Flat statement of
how solution will
address problem
Does not include
affected group
Does not describe
the process of
implementation.

8 - 12 points
How it should address the
problem or fix it. At least
one verifiable statistic or
examples or detail and
cite it
Shows how affected group
will benefit(or not)
Describes the process,
costs and materials for
implementation

13 15 POINTS
Provides several
specific
examples/statistics/d
etails how solution
will address the
problem.
Gives specific
examples/evidence of
how the affected
group will benefit(or
not)
Clearly explains
implementation, cost,
materials and other
relevant detail.

0 7 points
Reports on
outcomes
Not
recommendation
Does not address
the affected
group or the
feasibility/practica
lity

8 - 12 points
Clearly stated judgment of
solution
Projects effectiveness and
impact on affected group
Comments on the
practicality/feasibility of
the implementation
Support with researched
evidence.

13 15 POINTS
Comments on the
quality of the solution
and supports with
specific evidence
Comments on the
level of
feasibility/practicality
of the solution
Gives specific
details/examples.

Conclusio
n
05
points 4

0 2 point

3 4 points

5 points

Flatly summary of
problem, solution,
and whether is it
acceptable or not.
Brings up a new
subject.

Restates the final judgment

and connects with the
problem and how well the
solution will work.

Refers to topics
brought up in the
intro; indicates the
degree of challenge
the problem poses
and how the solution
can address it.

In-Text Citations
0 -10 points 8

Work Cited Entries

0 -5 points 5

Quality of sources
0 -5 points question
the lifehakker source 4
Paragraph Structure
0 -10 points 10

0 4 points
Material is not cited
correctly or
appropriately at least
three times; does not
follow MLA format.
0 2 point
MLA format is
haphazardly followed;
entries are not
alphabetized; uses URL
instead of citation.
Sources include
questionable credibility
or are personal sites
0 4 points
One or two topic
sentences missing;
Paragraphs lack unity

Coherence
0 -10 points 7

Paragraph not related to

topic;
Organization does not
follow a clear pattern;
Abrupt changes;

Diction
0 -10 points 7

Wording is vague;
Words are confused
with other meanings
Grammatical
conventions are
infracted;
Uses second pers prn;

Errors (prorated / 500 words) -5/2=-2=18

TOTAL POINTS______104______/130

5 7 points
Most material is
correctly and
appropriately cited;
MLA format is correct

8 10 points
All material is correctly
and appropriately cited;
follows MLA format
without errors

3 4 points
Three sources are on
Work Cited list; list is
mostly correct; all
entries are
alphabetized
Sources are relevant
and credible; some
sources are not
clarified in the essay.
5 7 points
Clearly stated topic
sentences;
Paragraphs clearly
related to thesis
Paragraphs arranged
in logical order;
Ideas follow logical
development
Employs transitions
when necessary
Uses appropriate
pronouns;
Avoids redundant
wording;
Uses words correctly
Avoids slang and worn
out cliches

5 points
All work cited entries are
correct.

All sources are relevant

and credible and clearly
identified in the essay
8 10 points
Topic sentences are
specifically worded and
link thesis and all
supporting material
Transitions move ideas
clearly throughout essay;
Ideas build on each
other to emphasize
thesis
Writers voice is clear
and authoritative;
Employs specific words;
employs active voice
and specific verbs;
Wording is concise