My first day at school

I remerber this day as a rainny day of September. I was 6 years old, I was happy and I felt a good Commented [HD1]: Spelling or typing mistake?
sensation when I entered in the building of my new school. I was going to meet new friends and also Commented [HD2]: Same as above
discover another things out of the subjets such how to work with another people, know new cultures... Commented [HD3]: No preposition needed. When I entered
the building
Ana introduced herself as our new teacher and after continue asking ours names, from where we Commented [HD4]: Wrong word. Other things. Another refers
come from, hobbies... I met a cool boy called Javier, he loved go surfing and playing tennis, so we met to one moreanother beer, another cup of tea, etc.
that afternon to play tennis. Commented [HD5]: Spelling
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Finally I arrived at home near the time of the sunset. My mom asked me how was my day. I answered
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it was pretty well and I was ansious to start my second day in my new school.
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tense for past incidents. And after she continued TO ASK ouR
names, from where we CAME from, hobbies, etc
The writing style is good, there is good flow and rhythm, BUT Commented [HD9]: He loved TO go surfing and PLAY tennis
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1.Try to be consistent with tenses. If you are relating a past incident, your basic tenses will simple
past, past cont, present perfect or past perfect..depending on the context. Note the use of infinitive
in HD8.

2. watch out for spelling errors. Keep enough time to double check your writing

All the best!