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Cortnee Bowser

Professor Beckelhimer

English 2089

27 November, 2017

Reflection or Self and Civil Discourses

While going through my revision process of my analyses I focused on the

suggestions that were given to me by my professor. I thought that everything that

was suggested made sense and was useful corrections. Another way that I really

tried to make my papers stronger was by having multiple reliable sources revise my

papers. I reread and corrected my papers, along with had my friend and the writing

center. By doing this I feel as in my papers are fully revised and the best that I could

make them into.

On the discourse analysis I focused on changing the way that I cited my

sources throughout my paper. Instead of using footnotes I put my citations into MLA

style. In my paragraphs I worked on better transitions, the ones that I had before

were very abrupt and didnt transition well. I struggle with comma splices often

while writing papers along with run-on sentences. Being able to identify comma

splices and run-on sentences are still hard for me, to be able to correct them I read

over Purdue OWL to read up on how to correct them. In the third paragraph I felt as

in that was my weaker paragraph out of my paper. I really put my focus on

improving this paragraph. I tried to connect the point that I was trying to make

more direct for the readers.

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For the genre analysis I felt like this paper needed more attention for small

details, such as sentence structure and sentences not making sense. By rereading my

paper out loud made a difference in helping me be able to reword my sentences. I

tried using more direct quotes from the sources that I was using instead of

summarizing them. Another thing that I fixed in the genre analysis were the same

things that I fixed in the discourse analysis, I corrected all of my comma splices, run-

on sentences and the way I cited my sources.

The Analysis of Activism and Civic Engagement the main issue with this

paper was I forgot to quote one of the sentences in the first paragraph. To fix it I just

but it in quotes and cited it. There was another part that I didnt quote so I fixed that

part of the paper as well. I went through and just cleaned up some of the grammar

errors that were through out my paper. I fixed things that were also wrong in my

other papers such as comma splices along with run-on sentences.

After all of the revising that was done to my papers, I think that the final

products all turned out really well and Im proud of how much time and effort I put

into them, to get great papers as a result.