Peer Review: Research Outline/Draft 1

Reviewer: Swabinash Swarnaraja

Reviewee: Shunyou Huang

Directions:
Look at the content of your peers outline/draft. Make marginal comments and a summative
comment for the author of the paper which you are reviewing. Carefully consider the authors
implementation of the P.I.E elements in each of their slices. Also consider how and why they
need to be changed. BE CLEAR about what you are saying and why you are saying it.

Keep in mind the following (but also include things you think should be added):
Does each P.I.E element do what it is supposed to in each of the slices?
Does each slice have only one flavor? (is the slice talking about more than one thing?)
Is each slice placed logically within the paper?
Did you understand the content of the slice as it was presented? Tell the author what you
did understand and didnt.
Are the slices understandable for an outsider? Explain what the author can do to make it
more understandable.
Did you understand the content of the paper as a whole? (Is this an effective research
paper? Explain)

Write detailed and helpful comments that will help your peer consider how to
better shape their slices to make a well formed research paper.

Prompt

1. Extended Response: In an academic voice, discuss the most/least important skill (particular ability or
expertise) or idea (understanding or awareness) that can be gained from this course by an outsider
student considering the readings which have been completed.

You may discuss:

Why one reading is more important than another based on the ideas presented in those readings.
A particular unit within the course.
A critique on a major assignment within the course.
Other (See me for approval)

Format and Requirements

1300-1700 words, 12pt Times New Roman, single spaced, 1 inch margins.
Proper title and MLA header.
Correct comma use and sentence boundary awareness.
 Use MLA format (8th edition) for in-text citations.
A works cited page is required.
You must use Detached Impersonal Style for the entire paper.
Quotes may be no longer than 3 lines.

Summative Comments:

The thesis is excellent. The P.I.E argued and supported the thesis very well.

Some of the points were too short. If the points could have contained a few more details
on what the paragraph is about, then it would have been good.

The conclusion could have been better. It reflects the information provided in the body
paragraphs, but lacks to argue and support the thesis.

Excellent use of Detached Impersonal Style.

When looking at the format and requirements, your outline had a few errors. The MLA
notation for in text citation did not follow the correct format. However, the comments I
provided may help you fix those errors.

Mainly consider the feedback provided in the document comments.