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4(a)
Giant Anteaters from Mars
It was a typical Saturday. I rolled out of bed at the crack of
noon and got to gaming. My tummy started rumbling so hard that I
thought the tremors would shake my laptop right off it. I realised
I’d have to go to Megamart and get some doughnuts and Hi-C.
As I passed, children dropped their tricycles and ran into their
houses crying. “Mommy, it has a long nose and a pointy horn! What
is it?”
I arrived at the shop and held the door open for a woman with
handfuls of carrier bags. She took several steps back, a horrified
look on her face.
“Ma’am,” I said.
She gulped.
Shrugging, I entered the Megamart, heading straight to the
bakery aisle. The other shoppers scattered, leaving a mess of
aromatic baked goods in their wake. I selected a dozen assorted
doughnuts. That would keep me going for the day.
Next I would need some beverages. As I reached the fizzy-
drinks cooler, I heard a scream of terror. I didn’t think much of it,
since there was usually a lot of screaming going on around me. A
short, fat guy with a pointed horn usually has that effect on
people. I started filling my basket with bubbly drinks in various
fruity flavours.
When I turned toward the checkout counters, contemplating
whether to use the self-checkouts or try my luck with an actual
person, I was horrified by what I saw.
Something was eating the customers.
Shoppers were running about like marbles in a bucket, with
panicked faces. One skater boy, his baggy sweatshirt torn down the
middle, ran right past me shouting, “Yo, dude, a giant anteater thing
with a long tongue! It’s eating everyone, OMG!”
Not wanting to be eaten, I dropped my basket and ran for the
door. Just outside, however, hovered a bus-sized beat-up craft
covered in red dust – Mars!
Just then I saw it: a fat, green bald thing with no ears, eyes, or
nose; just two tall antennae and a long tube protruding from its
head. With its slick yellow tongue, it was grabbing the screaming
shoppers like they were ants.
There are many things about the Nardvark that nobody
knows. One is that I, too, have a long tongue. I realised that only I
could stop the Giant Anteater from Mars from eating any more of
my neighbours.
The next time his tongue came out, I stuck mine out. Our
tongues got hopelessly tangled, and he turned towards me wailing. I
rammed my horn right between his feelers.
The people of Megamart cheered, “Oh, Nardvark, you’re my
hero!”
I instantly became the subject of many tweets and
instagrams. I was great.
Nard vs GAFM
If you are assigned to write a narrative essay, here are some narrative writing prompts:
There is a number of helpful techniques helping to invent an essay topic. If you don’t
have a clue what experience to describe, you can brainstorm with your friends, surf the
Internet or use this list of sample narrative essay topics.
Before getting started to choose a topic from the list provided by our writers, let’s read
one of the narrative essay examples:
It’s very effective to begin the narrative with an introduction of the experience and sets
forth the significance of the event to be written about. This ensures that the reader
understands the meaning of the event and they read through the narrative.
Another effective technique is to get right into the narrative and then ending the
essay with a paragraph that identifies the significance of the event. Doing so allows the
reader to formulate their own perspective of the meaning of the story and allows them to
more deeply feel the perception of what the writer feels is significant.
One also must keep in mind the basic model of storytelling and it should be
encompassed in the narrative essay and used as the main outline in the document. The
steps of the model include the plot, characters, the setting of the story, the climax or
main point of the story, and the ending.
Body Paragraphs: The paragraphs are split out into at least three supporting ideas that
are to be identified for the reader.
Conclusion: The conclusion provides for closing statements and a summary of the
lesson learned from the experience written about.
Narrative Essay Outline Sample
The following is a sample narrative essay outline related to making important decisions
as a young child.
Introductory Thesis: During my life, I was faced with many situations where I had to
make important decisions but were the toughest in middle school.
Body Paragraph 1: Upstate New York is where my eyes to the world opened up
surrounded by my family and cousins and where I experienced many first-time
experiences with close friends.
Body Paragraph 2: Leaving upstate New York and the life I was used to and not
having the close bonds of family around me.
Body Paragraph 3: A turning point in my life with new surroundings, friends, and
experiences that took getting used to.
Conclusion: Leaving the security of family and friends forced me to become more
independent and to appreciate the things I had much more that made me who I am
today.
Then, for some paranoid reason, I got the fear I was losing my job. Though I had done
nothing wrong, I assumed the worst.
Turning the corner to the office, and even though I was growing more worried and
anxious by the minute, I walked up to the receptionist’s desk.
“Mr. Jacobs wanted to see me. I’m Ralph Thompson,” I said.
“Yes, yes, just a minute,” she said. “He is in the middle of a business call at the
moment. He’ll be right with you when he’s done. In the meantime, please have a seat.”
And I did. But it was a very long wait. Much too long when you’re expecting to get axed.
“Mr. Jacobs will see you,” said the receptionist, who then opened the door of her boss’s
office.
The minute I walked inside, I noticed that my editor, my publisher and the company’s
boss were also in the HR director’s office. This was going to be worse than I had
imagined – much, much worse.
After saying hello to everyone, I grabbed a seat in the middle of the room. I noticed that
everyone was serious – almost too serious – and they seemed to be very
uncomfortable. Finally, I just couldn’t take it anymore.
“So I’m curious why you called me in this morning,” I said. “Is something wrong? We’re
on deadline, as you all very well know.”
“Mr. Thompson, nothing is wrong. Everything is just right. The company has made a
decision,” said the HR director.
“Yes, we have decided to terminate your position,” said the president of the company,
Jim Dorsey.
“I’m really sorry to hear that,” I said. “I … I’ve really enjoyed working here. And I don’t
know why this is happening. … Did I do something wrong?”
But, then, the most unlikely thing happened: they all broke out in laughter. And I felt like
standing up and slapping all of them with a heavy leather glove.
“Guys,” said my publisher, Lori, “we should stop laughing and be serious. It gives the
wrong message. Listen, Ralph, your position is being terminated – but it has nothing to
do with your performance – which has been nothing short of stellar.”
“Firing you? We’re not firing you,” she said. “It’s the total opposite.”
“I … I don’t know what to say. I was expecting the worst. I didn’t see this coming. Not at
all. I thought you were firing me. I was convinced of it.”
“You’re right,” I said after a few long seconds. “Sounds like a deal. I’ll take the job.”
And we shook hands; they said my new salary would go into effect immediately and we
all left the room for lunch.
It read: “I’ve lived through some terrible things in my life, some of which actually
happened.”
And then I learned a valuable lesson: to never take life too seriously, and to expect
better things to happen to me. Because they always do. Life’s a mental thing. Embrace
it.
How to structure your writing effectively
It is important to structure your work carefully so that a reader can follow your ideas. Whether you’re writing a story, poem or biography, a strong structure
will help keep your reader engaged.
An engaging opening
In a fictional narrative, the first paragraph should hook the reader and grab their attention. You might do this by describing the setting and giving specific
detail in a way that sets the tone for the rest of the story.
You can also make a convincing start by using dialogue or by dropping your reader directly into action. For example, Suzanne Collins opens The Hunger
Games with:
WhenI wake up, the other side of the bed iscold. Myfingersstretchout, seeking Prim'swarmth but finding onlythe roughcanvascover of the mattress. She must
have hadbad dreamsandclimbed inwithour mother. Of course, she did. Thisisthe dayof the reaping.
The reader knows the location of the story and the voice of the main character. The hook comes in the final sentence. The reader has to ask ’what is the
reaping?’ A successful opening invites the reader to ask questions about the rest of the piece.
A convincing close
Aim to finish your writing in a convincing way, providing a realistic and believable ending to the narrative. Try to resolve the story and leave your reader
feeling satisfied with the way the story ends.
I walk I walked
Using senses in your writing is a useful way of zooming in on details. Some people focus on the
visual aspects of a scene. By including sounds, smells, feelings and (where
appropriate) tastes you can really bring your writing to life.
Compare these two descriptions of a forest:
The trees were tall and an owl sat on a low branch above me. The green leaves were dark, even
by the light of the moon.
An owl screeched from the low branch above me. I couldn’t make out the tops of the trees, no
matter how far I craned back my neck. The green leaves seemed to whir in the cool breeze. The
moon failed to pierce the darkness.
Notice how appealing to the senses makes the second version more vivid.
Show, don’t tell
In real life we learn about people from their clothes and belongings as well as from the things
they tell us. We understand someone’s mood from their facial expressions, movements and tone
of voice – we don’t need someone to tell us they are in a bad mood…we can usually figure it out
from the way they are shouting!
It is the same when you read. Instead of telling your readers everything about a character, try
to show them instead.
For example:
Telling - The woman walked into the room looking intimidating and angry.
Showing - The woman stormed into the room, her black coat flying behind her. Her scowl was
fierce as she scanned the room. Her piercing eyes settled on Sarah.
Sentence variety
Planning a response
Proofreading
When you have completed a piece of writing, it is a good idea to check over what you have
created. Simple spelling errors, missing punctuation or words are common errors to make when
you are writing creatively. Once you look back over a piece of work, it is easier for you to spot
things and put them right.
Sample question
Question
Write the opening part of a story about a place during a storm.
Attempt 1
It was windy and wet and the road was full of big puddles. Walking along whistling he was
making his way home from school in a bit of a dream. He’d got out early because of the bad
weather. Which is why he’s whistling. He doesn’t much like wind or rain but he likes being let
out of school early. That’s when it happens this car comes out of nowhere and just drove right
through the biggest puddle you’d ever seen. It splashed up him as he stands there drenched not
knowing what had hit him, he just knew he’d be in for it when he got home because his new
parka was filthy and his mum would be furious.
Feedback - Basic
The writer shows an awareness of the purpose of the task and begins to write an entertaining story.
There is some attempt to control the narrative voice but the verb tenses vary from present to past.
The ideas are linked well and the structure of the paragraph is good.
There is little sentence variety and the sentence lengths are all similar, some being too long because of
punctuation errors.
The vocabulary choices are varied and effective but could be much more ambitious.
Attempt 2
The wind howled and the rain battered down. The roads were more like a lake than a city centre
– full of puddles. Walking along whistling, a schoolboy was making his way home from school.
He was in a bit of a dream. He’d been let out early because of the bad weather. He didn’t much
like the wind or the rain but he was thrilled at being let out early. That was why he was
whistling. You would think it was a summer’s day! That was when it happened.
The car came out of nowhere and just drove right through what was more like a miniature lake
than a puddle. The water just flew up from the road and showered over the boy who stood there
drenched. He didn’t know what to do but he knew he’d be told off when he got home, he was
wearing his brand new parka which his mum and dad bought him for his birthday at the
weekend.
Feedback - Improving
The writer communicates in a clear and effective way and matches the purpose of entertaining with the
story form and the intended audience.
The flow of images and ideas link nicely to create a well-structured narrative.
Sentences are varied in length and type creating a lively voice and help the story to flow.
The vocabulary choices and imagery are varied and begin to be ambitious (eg ‘howled’, ‘like a miniature
lake’).
Attempt 3
The wind howled like a banshee turning the rain into a salvo of bullets. This was a November
day in Oxford? It was more like the monsoon season in Delhi! The roads were covered in
puddles the size of small lakes. Walking along and seemingly unaware of it all was a schoolboy.
Whistling as he strolled along, hands in his pockets, he was casually making his way home from
school. To say he was in a bit of a dream was an understatement. He’d been let out early
because of the bad weather and, although he didn’t much like either wind or rain he was in his
new parka and, best of all, he was thrilled to the core at being let out of school early. That was
why he was whistling. To him it was a summer’s day!
That was when it happened.
A car came out of nowhere and drove right through a puddle that was doing a very good
impression of a miniature lake. The water leapt up from the road with a life of its own and
drenched the day-dreaming boy. He was jolted out of his reverie and stood there dazed and
drenched. He didn’t know what to do; but he knew he’d be in for it when he got home. His brand
new parka had turned from green to a kind of dirty khaki-brown and green mixed. This wasn’t
going to be fun. The parka had been a very expensive present from mum and dad.
Feedback- Even better
The story is absorbing and convincing.
Tone, style and voice all match purpose, form and audience to create an engaging narrative.
The sentences are varied in length and type to create a lively style.
Punctuation is accurate throughout and sophisticated in places with good use of semicolons.
Spelling is accurate and vocabulary choices are ambitious (eg ‘banshee’, ‘understatement’, ‘reverie’ and
‘khaki-brown’).
The description is impressive with some great uses of figurative language and alliteration (eg ‘like a
banshee’, ‘thrilled to the core’, ‘leapt up’ and ‘dazed and drenched’).