The Charge Nurse

Boronia Nursing Home

Coogee

28th April 2011

Dear Sir/Madam,

Re: Mrs. (Place a full stop after Mrs/Dr/Ms/Mr) Jane Lapaglia, aged 71

I am writing to refer Mrs Lapaglia, who will be under your care following discharge.

Mrs. (Place a full stop after Mrs/Dr/Ms/Mr) Lapaglia lives with her husband, Joe, in a four
bedroom (four-bedroom) unit. She has one son, Andrew, who visits them twice in (in is not
needed, delete it) a week. She likes classical music, ballet and AFL.

During hospitalisation, the patien (the patient –spelling miastake) was comatose and ventilated
for 7days (7 days-leave speace between 7 and days) in ICU. In addition, she was dialysed for 3
months (weeks-3/52 means 3 weeks), as a result, (place a comma after every linking phrase)
her urea and creatinine levels were decreased and (however) they are stable at the (the is not
needed, “at present” is good) present. Unfortunately, she contracted pneumonia for which she
has recieved (received – incorrect spelling) chest physiotherapy 2-hourly. (Place a full stop here
and start a new sentence) along (Along) with this, (place a comma here-remember to place a
comma after every connecting phrase) she has been provided with two litres of oxygen through
nasal prongs. Accordingly, the patient requires promting (prompting) to preform (perform)
activities of daily living(ADLS) (Try to avoid using brackets in a letter).

After discharge, it is important to continue oxygen therapy as per oxygen satuaration

(saturation) level. Makesure (Make sure has two word, so split them. Also, make sure is an
informal expression. Please write like “Could you please ensure”))that the patient maintains
adequate fluid to prevent decrease in renal function. Moreover, (add this. See when you list a
range of things to be monitored or provided care for, it is a good habit to use a linking phrase
in each sentence. For example: Also, Moreover, Furthermore, Besides) It is essential to repeat
her blood test weekly in order to monitor her electrolytes, urea and creatinine. Could you please
encourage the patient to maintain her independence and to perform ADLs (Try to avoid using
abbreviations and acronyms. Also, ensure you place a question mark when you request
services in a question form). Furthermore, with the consent of both husband and wife, Mrs
Lapaglia will be transferred to the nursing home and Joe will live in a (use this. Article is needed
for countable nouns) hostel for time being.
should (Should – Capital letter) any of the above require clarification, please revert. (Use
formal language. For example: If you need any further information, please do not hesitate to
contact me)

your (Yours) sincerely,

signature (Cut it)

Shruthi Anantha

Charge nurse

( Princ (Prince) Albert Hospital)