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Tyler Squire

Kandice Kardell

English 101

10 September 2018

Writing Project 1 Reflection

As a writer of this essay of my identity I feel that I struggle with the fact of organizing

my facts into a way to form a topic and or create a starting thesis. The reason for this is because I

always follow mistakes like choosing a undirect topic which makes me lose focus which made

me jumble up the conclusion of the essay which causes me to lake in the mechanical side in

formatting to create incomplete sentences. With these patterns and mistakes aside, I believe as

the writer of my identity I have addressed the topic thoroughly because I gave viable examples of

where I was not social in a way of not being able to talk to others as well as being able to interact

with others.

In the process of correcting this essay the peer review was respectfully the best way to

evolve my essay by correcting the essays mistakes that I did not catch when writing the essay

such as the grammatical errors which made my essay not flow nicely ,but sound butchered

without having proper word choice the peer review showed me that as I was checking for

misspelt words I put words that I used that were not directly used but mistaken for the right

spelling of a word or phrase. Furthermore, the way the peer reviews helped me in my essay is

giving specific areas in which I needed to correct such as being more personal in my writing by

giving real relative examples of my life where I was socially challenged and not just vaguely

explain my experiences without examples in the essay. Although, my essay had lots of errors as

explained when graded by my professor and peers the way I developed the idea of this essay was
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by planning the way to organize my thoughts through an outline. The way that the outline helped

me in my writing is giving me the ability to formulate my essay with examples of were my

identity happened and what caused it, also it helped determine the order of the experiences that I

encountered in order rather than all jumbled up in my writing. The way this essay was created

was discussing what identity I may represent by being able to discuss the topic of this essay with

my classmates that gave feedback through a way of having the ability to know what identity

would be more pronounced and easier to follow in my writing. So as a writer I believe there are

many things that helped me in writing about my identity but as well as many things that I need to

work on like mechanical issues and being able to organize my examples without being confused

about what I am writing about.