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Catherine Wishart Literacy Coach Adjunct Instructor, Burlington County College http://www.easyliteracy.com
Obviously, when describing a person, certain senses are not possible, such as touch and taste.
Make sure you know what your own emotional response is and stick to it. Dont vacillate between nice and mean, heroic and charlatan. Is the person nice or not? Is the person ethical or not? To describe the emotional response, use verbs, adverbs, and adjectives. These words will make the writing deeper and more meaningful than mere nouns will.
Smart Toddler Athletic Huge for age Loves The Incredibles Has a twin Loves to eat Tunes everything out when watching TV Loves books Plays soccer Has temper tantrums A good eater Says amazing things Doesnt like to help fix things Likes to cook
Loves his parents Great vocabulary Brown hair Blue eyes Huge smile Loves his dog Gets jealous of brothers Has asthma Born with hole in lung A real fighter Healthy now Loves Harry Potter but not the scary parts Has twin speak with his brother
And the thesis statement is: What makes me admire Drew the most is his vocabulary, his athleticism, and his ability to love.
Decide on what type of hook to use Decide on what type of conclusion to use
III. Athlete
A. Playing soccer B. Playing catch
Revising and Editing My Draft Adding Words for Clarity and Checking Grammar
Watching any child develop a vocabulary is always fun, but Drews robust vocabulary continues to amaze me. Drew is only three years old, but he uses words that are mature. For example, last week Drew went to the grocery store with his mother. Shop Rite just took over another store, so there were crowds of people swarming the aisles. While Drew and his mother were there, a stout, frazzled woman banged into the cart and then just kept going. In response, Drew shook his little head and muttered, Oblivious. I was shocked that he had used such an adult word, and I was even more surprised that he used the word correctly. Again last night, Drew proved his adult vocabulary skills. He was watching Are You Being Served? on television with his family. This British comedy uses colloquialisms from England and also uses a dry sense of humor that plays on the meanings of words. When Mr. Rumbold, the supervisor said, How am I going to get down? and Mrs. Spooner answered, Jump off the parapet and flap your ears, Drew started laughing and exclaimed, This is so funny. It really cracks me up! He understood that a parapet meant the ledge by the window and flapping ears meant trying to fly like a bird.
Paragraphs 3 and 4
Complete them just as paragraph 2 was completed. Make sure to add words so the reader can see and hear the scenes. Make sure to stay focused on the dominant impression you feel. Add adjectives, adverbs, and verbs to paint the pictures you see in your own head. Go back and revise and edit the paragraphs for clarity, detail, and grammar.
Reviewing Some Important Steps In Putting a Picture Into Words A Descriptive Essay
Use descriptive words, such as verbs, adverbs, and adjectives. Make sure to prewrite. Use an outline to stay organized. Use words that allow the reader to use his/her senses. Revise and edit to add clarity, depth, and correctness to your writing.